Friday 27 March 2015

My Epicly Awesome Backyard!


My dog dashes through the yard, jumping off the wooden fences like a spring. He has the energy of a thousand bolts of lightning. His slick, black fur blows through the warm, summer breeze. His crystal blue eyes fill with the joy of a gleeful, newborn child, as he throws the deflated, baby blue ball around the yard. The air is warm and crisp, and all you can smell is the fresh cut grass. You stare at the endless afternoon sky, as deep as the Atlantic Ocean. The sun beats on your skin, spreading the warmth of 100 campfires throughout your body. Your feet lie bare on the moist, green grass, as you stand underneath the tall, leafy tree that provides you shade. Warm wind gently blows in your direction, as gusts of wind sail through the wind, like a boat in the ocean on a beautiful day at sea. The brass chimes that hang from the tree start making mellow music, as your dog, Sully, runs up to you, begging you to throw the stick. Your three-year-old neighbor giggles with delight, his voice filled with joy. You smile to yourself. This is an amazing moment. You don't want this truly epic moment to ever pass.

4 comments:

  1. WOW! Now that's what I call a good use of metaphors and similes! :)

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  2. Well done Keira! Nice figurative language.

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  3. "That is brilliant! Absolutely brilliant!" Anyway, I like how you put lots of emotion in your paragraph. I can get a really good mental image

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  4. Thanks for all the positive feedback guys! Dose anyone have any suggestions for what I could do better?

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